Response to Time and Place

Today in class I reviewed Lyric and Prescot's papers. Lyric wrote in vignettes about her high school senior parking lot. What worked in her paper was her description of her feelings in each moment. As a reader I could feel her excitement to get home and then the fear that coursed through her before learning of her acceptance to her dream school. I could use more descriptions in my own paper about how I was feeling during the night in the car. Something that I think she should work on is adding in more description of the place itself. A parking lot is very easy to picture but when reading her paper, I am picturing my own senior parking lot. She did a very good job at describing her emotions so I know her description of the parking lot will be good.

Prescot wrote about his high school wrestling room in the style of a short story. What worked in his paper was that while staying in one moment, he described other times that happened in his paper. It felt like he was standing in that room, looking around and reflecting on past events. I loved this feeling, because it reminded me how I feel whenever I am back at my high school track. Something I think he should work on is adding dialogue into his paper. He has a lot of great moments that he can add dialogue in to help the reader feel like they are in the moment with him. Something he does really well that I can include in my paper is his description of the place. He described the room and also the feeling of love/hate when he goes into that room.

Overall both Lyric and Prescot are doing very well on their personal narratives and helping their reader imagine the place.